2020年10月31日雅思大作文真题解析及高分范文

2020年10月31日雅思大作文真题解析及高分范文

实现生活目标主要是运气使然吗？

Whether or not a person achieves his aims in life is mostly a question of luck? （2020/10/31)

一、解析&审题

题材：工作

题型：Discussion

关键词：aims in life + mostly + luck

需要讨论的观点：实现生活目标，主要是靠运气吗？

建议思路：运气对于成功很重要，但成功主要依靠努力。

复现情况：新题

本次考试的题目和上次一样也是新题，虽然如此，这个题目是大家比较熟悉的话题，因此写起来应该不缺少素材。

此外，需要注意的是，本题中包含了一个表示程度的mostly，这个词与best一样，大家可以在它上面做文章。

本题可以按照如下思路来写：

首先，成功有时的确需要运气。【比如好的出身，好的天赋的确可以帮助人们成功】

其次，运气不是成功最重要的要素，努力才是。【没有运气，很多人也成功；有了运气，很多人也不成功，由此认定，运气不是最重要的。】

结论：实现生活目标，主要靠努力，而不是运气，但是若有运气的眷顾，成功更容易来到。因此努力是成功的发动机，运气顶多可以成为加速器。

二、高分范文

Many people think that luck plays the most significant role in a successful life, but in my view, to achieve success in life, one needs continuous hard work, though luck does help in some cases.

Luck may assume different forms and help people in various ways. A man luckily born into a wealthy family will stand a better chance of becoming a successful businessman than one with poor family background. A person with a naturally good voice will be more likely to achieve his aim of becoming a great singer than one without.

However,luck alone cannot make a successful life. The most essential element of success is hard work. Therefore, even without rich parents, a man could still become a successful businessman if he works hard enough. Likewise, without a naturally good voice, a man could still become a great singer as long as he keeps on practising. In fact, we have seen many people who have failed to achieve their life's aims even though they appear to be very lucky in the first place. One good example is Zhong Yong in a Chinese story, who is so luckily talented as to be able to compose excellent poems as a seven-year-old child. Then his parents treat him as a money-making machine, showing off his talent around the country, and pretty soon he loses his natural talent and becomes an average child.

My conclusion, then, is that while luck may contribute to our success in life, hard work is what really makes us successful. As is suggested in the old saying "God helps those who help themselves", I believe hard work should become the engine of our life, and luck can at best be the accelerator.

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三、高分范文解析

01

Many people think that luck plays the most significant role in a successful life, but in my view, to achieve success in life, one needs continuous hard work, though luck does help in some cases.

许多人认为运气在成功的生活中起着最重要的作用，但在我看来，要在生活中取得成功，一个人需要不断的努力工作，尽管运气在某些情况下确实有帮助。

解析

(1) 本段开门见山，直接复述题目观点，然后给出自己的观点。

(2) Achieve 实现

(3) Continuous 持续不断的

02

Luck may assume different forms and help people in various ways. A man luckily born into a wealthy family will stand a better chance of becoming a successful businessman than one with poor family background. A person with a naturally good voice will be more likely to achieve his aim of becoming a great singer than one without.

运气可以用不同的形式，以各种方式帮助人们。一个幸运地出生在富裕家庭的人比一个家庭背景不好的人更有可能成为一个成功的商人。一个天生好声音的人比一个没有天生好声音的人更有可能实现成为一名伟大歌手的目标。

解析

(1) 本段用举例的方式证明运气可能帮助人们实现生活目标。本题关键词是“实现生活目标”，因此论证中应结合“生活目标”讨论。本段“成为成功商人”和“成为伟大歌手”都是“生活目标”的例子。

(2) Assume 呈现；承担

(3) Various 各种不同的

(4) Stand a better chance of... 有更好的机会做.......

03

However, luck alone cannot make a successful life. The most essential element of success is hard work. Therefore, even without rich parents, a man could still become a successful businessman if he works hard enough. Likewise, without a naturally good voice, a man could still become a great singer as long as he keeps onpractising. In fact, we have seen many people who have failed to achieve their life's aims even though they appear to be very lucky in the first place. One good example is Zhong Yong in a Chinese story, who is so luckily talented as to be able to compose excellent poems as a seven-year-old child. Then his parents treat him as a money-making machine, showing off his talent around the country, and pretty soon he loses his natural talent and becomes an average child.

然而，光靠运气是不能成功的。成功最基本的要素是努力工作。因此，即使没有富有的父母，一个人如果足够努力，仍然可以成为一个成功的商人。同样，没有天生的好嗓子，一个人仍然可以成为一个伟大的歌手，只要他坚持练习。事实上，我们已经看到许多人未能实现他们的生活目标，即使他们起初似乎是非常幸运的。一个很好的例子是中国故事中的仲永，他很幸运地拥有天赋，七岁就能够写出优秀的诗歌。然后他的父母把他当作赚钱机器，在全国炫耀他的才华，很快他就失去了他的天赋，成为一个普通的孩子。

解析

(1) 本段讨论运气不是成功的充分条件，提出努力对于成功更为重要。

(2) Alone 仅仅

(3) Likewise 同样

(4) Keep on doing... 坚持做......

(5) In the first place 起初；首先

(6) Compose 创作

(7) Average 普通的

04

My conclusion, then, is that while luck may contribute to our success in life, hard work is what really makes us successful. As is suggested in the old saying "God helps those who help themselves", I believe hard work should become the engine of our life, and luck can at best be the accelerator.

因此，我的结论是，虽然运气可能有助于我们在生活中的成功，但努力工作才是真正使我们成功的原因。正如老话“上帝帮助那些帮助自己的人”所说的那样，我认为努力工作应该成为我们生活的引擎，运气充其量只能是加速器。

解析

(1) 本段总结前面的讨论，并换一种方式重新表达自己的观点，即“运气不是最重要的，努力才是最重要的”。

(2) Contribute to... 有助于......

(3) Engine 引擎

(4) At best 至多；充其量

(5) Accelerator 加速器

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